And the key word here is
majority. Just because it doesn't particularly seem to be stylized towards the mainstream, stereotyped kind of 'manga,' doesn't mean that it can't be called manga in itself. 'Manga' is just the Japanese word for 'comics,' and there is nothing in any definition that specifies how an image must look to be considered manga. It's up to the artist to decide that for themselves.
I really don't think we should be arguing about this. It's supposed to be a thread for discussion about Evil's piece (as well as comments on others, if they are posted, I guess. But Evil started the thread)
Evil, yours looks pretty good (the eye perspective especially). The only things that bug me are the lineart's random thickness (if you're drawing with a mouse or mouse pad, try using the pen tool for lineart, it works really well), and the width of the neck. If you're trying for an anime style, they generally tend to have small necks. Also, work on the hair physics - the bangs are going right while the rest of her hair is pointed towards the right. Oh, and if you have illustrator, you can get brush sets from deviantArt and other sites that will be thicker in the middle, like an actual stroke, without needing a tablet of some sort.
I'd also suggest looking at the various tutorials on
deviantArt as well as people's various images. That can help to get body structure correct, which I tend to have some trouble with. I also have a relatively small imagination for character design, but I'm trying to open up from that particular problem.
Of course, you should work on detail, coloring, and shading as well.
LightningEagle, I like yours a lot; there's nothing I can pick out that I really don't like about it. The mood shows that there's a good deal of plot behind the image; is it based on something from Square Enix, maybe?