[RPG/Challenge] Order a pizza !!

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Offline Razor

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[RPG/Challenge] Order a pizza !!
« on: May 07, 2009, 18:46:52 »
Finally here is the awsome level
It well SHOCK you

please try it

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Link #1
Link #2 (Working on)

IMPORTANT : Please descover the both endings (Two) !!


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Re: [RPG/Challenge] Order a pizza !!
« Reply #1 on: May 07, 2009, 19:02:32 »
well, i really liked the
Spoiler: (click to show/hide)
in the castle, a sign says 'this isn't finished'. if it's not finished, why did you release it? also, why is there no music, but the download is still more than 3mb?

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Re: [RPG/Challenge] Order a pizza !!
« Reply #2 on: May 07, 2009, 19:16:20 »
Recall (if you've read) the "Only post your level in here when its finished..." below the board name.

And, well, I thought the level was... pretty boring. There's not too much to comment on really. Not very "SHOCK"-ing, either.

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Re: [RPG/Challenge] Order a pizza !!
« Reply #3 on: May 08, 2009, 12:53:04 »
its not *BETA* but as you can say its v.1
Note : you should beat ALL OF THE MARIO PART if you wanna play it !!

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Re: [RPG/Challenge] Order a pizza !!
« Reply #4 on: May 09, 2009, 14:37:29 »
 ;)good! and the super mario part was awesome!!!
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Re: [RPG/Challenge] Order a pizza !!
« Reply #5 on: May 10, 2009, 05:41:21 »
This was pretty good - better than your previous level, I think.

Spoiler: Regarding the 'secret' (click to show/hide)

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Re: [RPG/Challenge] Order a pizza !!
« Reply #6 on: May 10, 2009, 12:56:04 »
This was pretty good - better than your previous level, I think.

Spoiler: Regarding the 'secret' (click to show/hide)

Dont say this

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Re: [RPG/Challenge] Order a pizza !!
« Reply #7 on: May 10, 2009, 15:37:22 »
You should try to use better graphics in your levels.
It`s to clean and some details would be good. The shifts are great but... that`s it.
And I think that it will be necessary to substantiate your promises.
The Wood was more like a plain with some lonely trees, the great castle... it`s a joke, isn`t it? And the volcano was... well it looked like a simple mountain. No lava, no smoke, nothing.

Try to add a connection to the plot in the mario world and use the tilesets wisely. You can add so many good looking things (Oh and you should add music) and objects, use them!

I liked the master of the land =)
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Re: [RPG/Challenge] Order a pizza !!
« Reply #8 on: May 11, 2009, 10:30:46 »
This was pretty good - better than your previous level, I think.

Spoiler: Regarding the 'secret' (click to show/hide)

Dont say this

Don't say what, exactly? You didn't like my criticism, or you think I'm revealing too much of the 'secret' despite it being in a spoiler?

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Re: [RPG/Challenge] Order a pizza !!
« Reply #9 on: May 13, 2009, 11:49:06 »
Haha, fun story! Would be much more fun if there were more of everything. :)

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Re: [RPG/Challenge] Order a pizza !!
« Reply #10 on: May 13, 2009, 22:57:38 »
do not say that the secret is kinda EASY i have been working for a while
AND YOU ARE SAYING THAT !!
I'm sorry, but if you don't want your levels to be criticized you shouldn't post them here. As for the actual level, it's not very good. There is almost no scenery, and the castle isn't even done. There's almost no challenge, too.

Check out my tilesets!

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Re: [RPG/Challenge] Order a pizza !!
« Reply #11 on: May 14, 2009, 06:32:24 »
do not say that the secret is kinda EASY i have been working for a while
AND YOU ARE SAYING THAT !!
I'm sorry, but if you don't want your levels to be criticized you shouldn't post them here.
Indeed. Also, I wasn't saying the secret was easy. I was merely pointing out that if you have a map with the secret clearly labelled, then it's not very secret, is it? I believe you even showed it in a preview screenshot.

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Re: [RPG/Challenge] Order a pizza !!
« Reply #12 on: May 14, 2009, 16:12:49 »
Everybody is saying the super mario part is Fun  X)

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Re: [RPG/Challenge] Order a pizza !!
« Reply #13 on: May 15, 2009, 18:42:38 »
Not onlay the preview-screens are showing the secret. The map you can use in the game itself will tell you about the position of the super mario world...
And, indeed, it`s very easy to find it without hints thats it.

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Re: [RPG/Challenge] Order a pizza !!
« Reply #14 on: May 18, 2009, 02:34:08 »
While I typically try to avoid criticism, I feel it's necessary in this case...
Let's say I wanted to make a s'more and I gave it the nice, rigid graham crackers for structure, the marshmallow for a good texture and flavor, and the chocolate for that extra touch...
This level isn't the best s'more ever, gotta say. Its plot is inherently whimsical, so I didn't expect much, but it'd be nice to have one beyond a simple "Go get pizza for ....this guy...." There goes the structured graham cracker. It's soggy. But that's okay, we can eat it with a napkin maybe.
Now for the marshmallow...this whole thing felt empty. No flavor, no textured feel.
But, maybe the chocolate? Some nice touches as a consolation? I'll give you that that's not horrid shift work, but I've seen better.
All in all, I wouldn't eat your s'more. But at least you've got the basics. Now go and put some effort into one, and I think you could whip up a nice one.
...Maybe a little more thought and effort, is all. But I've seen much worse. I'll give you that. :3