Coquelicot's Tea Party [Easy][Environmental/Misc.][Small][KS+]

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Offline kharms

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This is my first attempt at a level! I had this idea floating around in my head, and decided it was time to take a crack at the level editor.

Juni is forced to visit an old "friend," and things don't go as expected.

It's pretty small, and has two endings.

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I would love feedback and if you reported any bugs, I had a lot of fun making this!

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Offline Fubaka

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Re: Coquelicot's Tea Party [Easy][Environmental/Misc.][Small][KS+]
« Reply #1 on: November 07, 2016, 20:46:28 »
Two bugs I noticed here.

1: You have a lot of areas set to play an ambi track 23, yet no such file exists in the level itself, did you put this track in the Data folder instead of your level's own internal folder?

2: The wall meant to block Juni's path at x1013y997 is incomplete, and leads to a void.

Other than that, I didn't notice anything severe. The level itself is interesting, though a bit dull to play. For the next one, I might suggest you make a more interactive landscape, if you know what I mean.

Still, not bad for a first attempt. Have a star.
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Re: Coquelicot's Tea Party [Easy][Environmental/Misc.][Small][KS+]
« Reply #2 on: November 08, 2016, 17:01:36 »
I'd call this a fine start. I believe that while you were designing the level you cared more about telling a short interesting story than creating a gameplay-focused experience?

As for the story - it was quite original and surprising. I don't really get what happened to the characters (or who are they), but ambiguity is something I like in storytelling. You could give us some more information to go on though  ;).

Also, I really enjoyed the cutscenes! They were very nicely done.

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Re: Coquelicot's Tea Party [Easy][Environmental/Misc.][Small][KS+]
« Reply #3 on: November 18, 2016, 22:12:27 »
Thanks for making the level,
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Kharms!
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I enjoyed the story, and I was thoroughly impressed with the cutscenes! I wish we'd see drawn cutscenes more often.  8)

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Re: Coquelicot's Tea Party [Easy][Environmental/Misc.][Small][KS+]
« Reply #4 on: November 19, 2016, 04:37:21 »
This was a great first level. A little bland perhaps with a somewhat confusing story but a good level nonetheless. Like the others, I really enjoyed the cutscenes. Good work!

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Re: Coquelicot's Tea Party [Easy][Environmental/Misc.][Small][KS+]
« Reply #5 on: January 08, 2017, 16:15:18 »
A bit late to the party, but I concur with the general opinion. It was pretty good for a first level. Cute, surreal and somewhat creepy at times. The hand-drawn cutscenes are definitely one of its strong points. Hope to see more levels from you in the future! :)

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