somewhere in there, I think there should have been some kind of actual mention or discussion of the sudden girl/ball hybridization. This isn't a severe issue, but something about it. For instance, are there two minds in that head? Is the ball a thoughty ball?
you'll know that somebody sure seems to think that Mi is the peripheral and the ball is the main form.
I personally dig these things, and a mention of it would have kept me from hitting a narrative bump at that point.