[Challenge/Size:Med/Dif:Normal to Hard] Run the Gauntlet: Part 1

More bugs: There's some light glow on layer 3 in the conference room. It also appears to be on another layer, so don't be fooled when you look with the editor. There's also a monitor brace on layer 3 in the final room. The other braces are not solid, which makes me think it's a mistake.

Quote from: egomassive on January 10, 2012, 04:00:46

I looked through them for spelling errors and here is what I found:

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Part 0
[x1029y1000] Sneak not Sneek
Betrayal, Scene 14: silencing not scilencing
Betrayal, Scene 22: appreciation not appriciation

Part 1
Revalations, Scene32: I'll rip his tie from neck -vs- I'll rip his tie from his neck
The name of ^that^ cutscene should be Revelations
[x1012y1001] unforeseen not unforseen
[x1013y1000] persistence not persistance
[x1028y1003] abandoned not abondoned
[x1026y1003] What is going here? -vs- What is going on here?

This list ignores punctuation, capitalization, and similar errors that are too numerous to list. I'm considering them part of your poetic style because that's what most of them appear to be.

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I noticed two at the end: "assisstant" and "aquitted" (assistant and acquitted). But LordMarzog might have noticed them already. I'm not sure.

A mistake I kept seeing was punctuation around exclamations. You'd have something like "Wow." instead of "Wow!" or you'd have "Wow that's great!" instead of "Wow, that's great!" Although not grammatically correct, your versions could very well be how you intended the character to say them. Call it stream of consciousness and you can get away with anything punctuation wise. Just ask William Falkner.

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I would use "Wow.' if I was trying to give the impression of sarcasm. ...

Nicely done! This part seems more text-heavy to me.

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The personal testing chamber of the boss was extremely easy.
About secret areas, I love it when there are logical clues leading to them. For example, the secret part of Secretglitch's Dark Sea. Second best case, hard to reach places. Third, places where you don't usually go, like jumping off a cliff. But in most levels I only find secrets with level editor, because there are no clues for them, just invisible paths.
BTW, I expected the solid lamp side egomassive has mentioned to be a way to a secret area, thought it would help me reach the ventilation shaft with double-jump or something like that.

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I think I'll take a few of the needless signs out. Like the "Lava? Why is there always lava in these places?" and similar lines.
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Only just started but there's a "cyro cylinder" in place of "cryo" in Scene2 of the intro.

Really minor one but in the first cutscene "doing really well Sir!" would usually be "doing really well, sir!" and there's another "cyro" a few scenes later. Also a typo that's still in from the previous version near the end; "security system is totally rouge!" - should be "rogue!".

Really minor ones again but..; in the first secret area, the second sign would normally have a lowercase letter as it's a continuation from mid-sentence and, on the way to the second secret, "My my aren't you clever?" would normally have a comma; "My my, aren't you clever?"

On a positive note, though, I really like the way you've changed the spikes there to give a clue  
And on another positive note, I really like the line "At least I'll get a break from all this concrete!". I'm sure it's not the reason you put it in there but it feels like a nice little "in joke"  

In Carla's sign after the cutscene, "use a old cave" should be "use an old cave".

In the penultimate cutscene, "it'll take a 1,000 years". Should probably be "take 1,000 years" or "take a thousand years".

There are a couple more missing commas around but I thought the text definitely benefitted from their lack.

x1000y1006, x999y1006 and x1000y1005 - It's possible to double-jump up to the gaps in the ceiling and climb up into a wallswim.
x998y1005 and x999y1005 - Ditto up into a void.

As to my actual reaction to the changes, I'm really impressed with the work you've done on the Administrator's Facility; it feels a lot fuller and significantly more challenging now. I did miss a few of the messages in the first half but I think you've probably made the right call for the level there.

On a side-note, sorry for leaping right in and picking holes in what must have been a lot of hard work. I promise you I really like this level and I only mention these things in the spirit of bringing them to your attention... not that the post looks very good-natured but I assure you that's a relic of using it as notepaper during my playthrough, not any indication of intent to be hyper-critical  

This might be a problem with KS Ex. If you see this Greyface I might need your help here. Does Widget need KS Ex in order to see the custom enemy?

Now the ending sequence is very cool. I hope you'll post the smasher in templates objects thread. BTW, I'm using your foreground glass cylinder in my level

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One room I didn't like is x1002y1004. Spikes make random turns, have random speed and in addition to that there's no save point before them. So, it takes a lot of waiting to find the right moment.

Oops, I didn't realise it was now a KSEx level.. though I did think it seemed a little strange to have such obvious holes in it 
Sorry, I should've guessed I'd done something wrong.