[Challenge] Far and Away

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Offline Frin

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[Challenge] Far and Away
« on: April 04, 2009, 06:01:27 »
This is my first KS level, so I thought it'd be good to post here to get some suggestions and critique. I've been working on this for about a month and I'm at the point where I need feedback to keep going  :)

Back story:
Juni's uncle Johannes is imprisoned far and away from her home by a despotic king. She must set out on her own to free him from captivity. Luckily, the people of the land are on her side and will help her in any way they can, including letting her into their homes at a moment's notice. Will Juni free Johannes, or will the king and the hostile environment keep her subdued?
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I've been using mostly the default tilesets, but in the newer screens I've branched out a little to include art of my own.  I'm a little worried it might be sort of plain, so I'll work on that. It's at about 160-170 screens right now.

Some screens:
Spoiler: (click to show/hide)

Comments? Critique? Hopes, dreams, fears?

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Re: [Challenge] Far and Away
« Reply #1 on: April 04, 2009, 06:29:24 »
First of all, welcome on the forum  :D
I like those screens, I can see each of them were designed with much care. I can't say that the story is original, but it still works ok.

For the tilesets,
Edit: here is a link to all the public tilesets.


[mod]Ignoring, deliberately breaking the rules is not funny, ":shifty:" . <_<[/mod]
« Last Edit: April 04, 2009, 15:07:57 by Miss Paula »

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Re: [Challenge] Far and Away
« Reply #2 on: April 04, 2009, 06:32:12 »
Or you could just tell him to replace /forum/ in the URL to /forum2/.

EDIT: Oooohhh...Those screens look AMAZING for a first level! :O You may even give me a run for my money, and I've already made...let's see...3, I think, and I'm in the process of making a fourth one. Well, I'll give this a try.
« Last Edit: April 04, 2009, 06:34:14 by Pumpkinbot »
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Re: [Challenge] Far and Away
« Reply #3 on: April 04, 2009, 18:44:30 »
First of all, welcome on the forum  :D
I like those screens, I can see each of them were designed with much care. I can't say that the story is original, but it still works ok.

For the tilesets,
Edit: here is a link to all the public tilesets.


[mod]Ignoring, deliberately breaking the rules is not funny, ":shifty:" . <_<[/mod]

Thanks - I'll definitely work some of those in! (And I'll be the first to admit, story telling isn't my strength  :P2)

Re: [Challenge] Far and Away
« Reply #4 on: April 04, 2009, 23:58:04 »
Wow those screenies look beautiful , are you sure this is your first level?  C)p

Yeah as people said story nothin new but man, those areas look good, can't wait to play !
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EDIT: oh right.. forgot, Welcome to the forum and the world of editing!
« Last Edit: April 05, 2009, 00:06:34 by Strange Darkness »

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Re: [Challenge] Far and Away
« Reply #5 on: April 05, 2009, 00:15:07 »
Want!
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Re: [Challenge] Far and Away
« Reply #6 on: April 10, 2009, 23:12:11 »
I've been busy, but here're some more screenies for the time being. I hope I finish this in a week or two, getting close...
Spoiler: (click to show/hide)

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Re: [Challenge] Far and Away
« Reply #7 on: April 11, 2009, 00:03:34 »
Looks great. Especially for a first!
I'm impressed  :^^:

Re: [Challenge] Far and Away
« Reply #8 on: April 11, 2009, 02:30:37 »
I'd say that in the second screeine, the water looks to bright for the tileset. (The wiggle water on the ground at least)
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Re: [Challenge] Far and Away
« Reply #9 on: April 11, 2009, 03:44:22 »
I'd say that in the second screeine, the water looks to bright for the tileset. (The wiggle water on the ground at least)

I'm inclined to agree, though I'm not sure how to make my own water...

Re: [Challenge] Far and Away
« Reply #10 on: April 11, 2009, 06:30:32 »
Bank one, object 13 vs. bank one, object 6.
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Re: [Challenge] Far and Away
« Reply #11 on: April 12, 2009, 02:33:40 »
Bank one, object 13 vs. bank one, object 6.
Huh?

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Re: [Challenge] Far and Away
« Reply #12 on: April 12, 2009, 04:22:41 »
He means use that water.
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Re: [Challenge] Far and Away
« Reply #13 on: April 12, 2009, 05:02:15 »
:)
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Re: [Challenge] Far and Away
« Reply #14 on: April 12, 2009, 08:11:05 »
I like those screens I think you took much care on the design.

I'm loking forward to this !  :^^:
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