[WIP/Story] Class of 2012 (New movie ruined it. D: )

I'm gonna bump this because there's two chapters nobody's read, and it's been a while since anyone posted. (*shot by InvisiMod^TM*)

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The main character seems boring so far...

Quote from: Pumpkinbot on June 05, 2009, 06:20:34

I'm gonna bump this because there's two chapters nobody's read, and it's been a while since anyone posted. (*shot by InvisiMod^TM*)

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The main character seems boring so far...

I didn't even know there was a InvisiMod. I meant InvisiMod as in Invisible Moderator.
Anyway, they seem boring? Connor, I guess so. Gloria...Meh, maybe. I'll try to spice it up! *adds cinnamon*

A few grammatical issues (I overuse commas, I think, but you seem to underuse them a bit!) but this is getting really quite interesting!

Oh, and Osbert becomes Albert for one sentence in Chapter 8...

A few grammatical issues (I overuse commas, I think, but you seem to underuse them a bit!) but this is getting really quite interesting!

Oh, and Osbert becomes Albert for one sentence in Chapter 8...

*headdesk* He went through a name-change. I'll fix it. Also, if you want to see underuse fo commas, read The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy. But tha doesn't distract from the book's awesomeness!

Indeed, HGttG is pretty good. I suppose commas are to some extent down to the discretion of the author and how you want the sentences to sound; what pauses to go where, etc.

Awww. I'm sorry this didn't work out in the end.

Awww. I'm sorry this didn't work out in the end.

That's okay. I also realized how similar it was to National Treasure 2.

Not really..?

Not really..?

This story was going to be somewhat based off of Green Day's album, "21st Century Breakdown". One of the lines from "Last of the American Girls" is "She's got a little book of conspiracies right in her hand". That book was going to have conspiracies like the President's book from NT2.

Ah.