Does this look okay?

Here's one more section

I would just add "...with the ball-bouncing mechanic from Within a Deep Forest."

That looks perfect to me with Ponto's addition.

For the previous one, a comma in the new part would make it much easier on the eyes:

"He lived three months in France as well, studying the language and exchanging ideas with French alchemists."

For the previous one, a comma in the new part would make it much easier on the eyes:

"He lived three months in France as well, studying the language and exchanging ideas with French alchemists."

Or alternatively, "While living in France, he studied the language and exchanged ideas with French alchemists." If the amount of time he spent there isn't a major detail.